leaving it all
note to self
Here is a villanelle, a French form established in the sixteenth century
that uses meter, rhyme, and a specific pattern of repeated lines.
This, my first attempt ever, is written in pentameter.
sometimes I long to simply take high flight
to leave this crooked world behind, alone
and reach in deep for purest, clearest light
it’s madness here—the mean and righteous fight
they grab and push and nab the richest bone
sometimes I long to simply take high flight
and flee this place at dawn or plushest night
seek peace elsewhere, a place that is unknown
and reach in deep for purest, clearest light
to watch all suffering souls, their dreadful plight
it hurts my heart and makes me feel like stone
sometimes I long to simply take high flight
to soar, and bank, to find the broadest sight
and then unearth the place that’s my true home
and reach in deep for purest, clearest light
how will I find the strength for loft and height
so courage, love, and beauty may atone?
sometimes I long to simply take high flight
and reach in deep for purest, clearest light
2022 ©Amrita Skye Blaine
I’m writing a poem a day. These are drafts—they may never turn into anything more or they might flower.
Interesting. It reminds me of the pantoum.Which I’m reminded I enjoy writing. So many ways to write…so little time.
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thanks, Lanetty! Yes, it has some similarities to the Pantoum, although I think they arose in different parts of the world.
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Fabulous! Absolutely rich and juicy, deep and fabulous! And you achieved the form! XOXO, R
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Wow, this is spectacular! You succeeded the “assignment”, and made a beautiful image & emotion filled poem! I love it!
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Thanks, Rabia! I’ve been taking a class every two weeks with Jeanne Rana, Kiran’s wife, from the Sufi Way. She’s introduced us to form, which I think has been good for me.
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